The Rebel Flagship was approaching fast. My adrenaline was rushing and the crew where nervous, the weapons where on standby. The flagship felt like every centimetre it passed by it got faster and faster. There lasers fired at us missing just.
That meant the battle had began and we had to man the stations. The stations where maned in seconds and we started our offensive. Our lasers fired and the hit three of there laser cannons destroying all of them. Next we aimed for there missiles because if they fired they would certainly take us out. We fired our lasers hoping they would hit before the missiles fired and they just did. The rebel ship started to turn around and was trying to escape.
The rebel flagship was gaining ground fast and was going to escape. We fired shots at there main engine and only one of them hit. At the start the explosions where small, but in seconds they got bigger and bigger. The back end suddenly exploded in huge ball of flames that left them sitting ducks. We fired everything we ad trying to finish them off a quick as possible. The exploded in the biggest explosion I’ve ever seen.
The flagship had been destroyed and now I felt great pride in what I had done. As it the explosion finished parts of the ship flew past just missing the ship. There was also a great feel for celebration. It was a rush of excitement and happiness and freedom to the galaxy. Now it was time to head back to back and party.
When I was writing I used Intense Action to tie the beginning to the end. I also used the paragraph sandwich to organise my sentences so they would go in an order. The paragraph sandwich was very helpful and made my story interesting.