Monnee Ponds vs St. Monicas

The game was about to start and nobody knew who was going to win. The stakes where high because if we lost we would drop 3 points and lose a spot. The game kicked off and the opposition was on the ball and were attacking and nothing came of it and they where stoped. We started our first attack and trying to make something of it but nothing happened and the opposition was back on the ball. “Stop them, don’t let them through on goal”, I yelled. The ball was stoped and booted up field and the rest of the half was pretty dead.

The ball went back and forth and no one had a clear chance really. There where some good attacks but none of them where dangerous enough to be a goal. The half dragged on until the ref finally blew the whistle for half time. The half had ended and the second was near. “We have to retain possession and work our way into the box and since there’s no offside we need to take opportunity of that and use it to our favour not there’s”, firmly said the coach, ” good luck lads and lets get a win”.

The second half was in the first few minutes and we started to dominate the possession quite well and within minutes we scored our first goal. The second felt like is was about happen and then I realised I was on the ball and in front of goal. I had a shot and it went in and it was my first goal of the season and hopefully not my last. The half went on and we scored two more goals controlling the possession and dominating and we were going to dominate it all the way to the finish.

We did and came out with an outstanding victory and great spirits. We were went away and celebrated.


The Last Battle

The Rebel Flagship was approaching fast. My adrenaline was rushing and the crew where nervous, the weapons where on standby. The flagship felt like every centimetre it passed by it got faster and faster. There lasers fired at us missing just.

That meant the battle had began and we had to man the stations. The stations where maned in seconds and we started our offensive. Our lasers fired and the hit three of there laser cannons destroying all of them. Next we aimed for there missiles because if they fired they would certainly take us out. We fired our lasers hoping they would hit before the missiles fired and they just did. The rebel ship started to turn around and was trying to escape.

The rebel flagship was gaining ground fast and was going to escape. We fired shots at there main engine and only one of them hit. At the start the explosions where small, but in seconds they got bigger and bigger. The back end suddenly exploded in huge ball of flames that left them sitting ducks. We fired everything we ad trying to finish them off a quick as possible. The exploded in the biggest explosion I’ve ever seen.

The flagship had been destroyed and now I felt great pride in what I had done. As it the explosion finished parts of the ship flew past just missing the ship. There was also a great feel for celebration. It was a rush of excitement and happiness and freedom to the galaxy. Now it was time to head back to back and party.


When I was writing I used Intense Action to tie the beginning to the end. I also used the paragraph sandwich to organise my sentences so they would go in an order. The paragraph sandwich was very helpful and made my story interesting.

Soccer Ball Hail

“What ya doing Bobby”, said Alkanserationaler.

“Not much ya dosh”, said Bobby.

Then suddenly Freddy came parachuting out of nowhere and landed on top of Bobby making him go tumbling to the ground.

“What was that for”.

“I’m crazy”.

“OK guys where not here to fight where here to talk about…”

“You forgot what to talk about”, yelled Bobby.

“I’m pooing my pants”.

Alkanserationaler  and Bobby start at him thinking what he had done to himself since the last time they met. Last time they met he was fit speaking about things that where appropriate but now he locked messed up. In fact Freddy was going crazy because he was taking bad stuff.

“Have you being taking bad stuff Fred”, said Alkanserationaler in confusion.

“Yes evil clown”.

“What the”!!!

The suddenly out of nowhere.

“Hail the size of soccer balls are raining down on the city and destroying everything and everyone in it’s path”, yelled a terrified men.

Splat!!!, “that dude just got destroyed”. said Bobby.

“Dudes lets escape to the other side of the wall and be safe”.

They ran hard and fast and were getting closer. At the same time the storm was gaining on the. Time was running every second. The closer they got the more hopeful they got. So they got closer and closer and closer.

Freddy suddenly snapped out of craze.

“Where getting closer”, yelled Alkanserationaler over the hail.

“Jaffa Cakes”, said Fred.

“Well your not having any” yelled Bobby.

They where almost there and hopes where high. Yet it wasn’t over yet because they still had to pass security.

“Let us go through guards and we will not need to fight you”, yelled Bobby.

“Go through and be safe because were dumb and drunk and don’t care.”

Clatter Clatter Clatter Clatter!

“Machine guns!”

“Wait it’s the Americans there here to save us, run to the other side”.

“Your safe now guys you can go and become citizens of West Germany”.

“Yay we made it”, they all yelled in excitement.

The End.